Progress Conference sample essay

AGENDA
What are the points which I was able to do correctly?
What are my common mistakes in writing?
Is my topic broad enough to cover the essential parts?
Are my sources credible and relevant to the topic I’m writing about?
Will my progress plan be effective, or should I redo it and think of other approaches?

REVISION

Original paragraph

In the case assignment, Chuck Hanrahan raised an issue on the problem of illegal immigrants in the United States. He believes existing federal laws are the solution to the problem. What is lacking is the political will to implement them by the right agency. The critical thinking techniques of Brown and Keeley (2006) will serve as the model for this exercise. Hanrahan’s arguments are outlined below.

The problem can be solved only by addressing respective demand and supply factors. The government needs political will to implement fully laws covering illegal immigrant workers.

Revised

In the case assignment, Chuck Hanrahan raises an issue on the problem of illegal immigrants in the United States. He believes that existing federal laws are the solution to the problem. What is lacking is the political will to implement them by the right agency. The model to be used as a guide for this case assignment will be that of Brown and Keeley (2006). Hanrahan’s arguments are outlined below.

The problem can be solved only by addressing respective demand and supply factors. The government needs political will to fully implement laws covering illegal immigrant workers.

Paraphrasing

Original referenced text

By not using critical thinking techniques, management analysts may limit their views and opinions that prevent scrutiny of problem situation and unwittingly are led to the wrong solutions by decision traps (Langlois, G. 2007).

Paraphrase

Critical thinking techniques help management analysts to have a broader view of a problem, leading to the right solutions and away from decision traps.

PROGRESS CHECK

One of the main problems that I encountered is about talking and coordinating with other people. In order to solve this problem, I need to
Assess which information that I have is relevant or not.
Decide on what course of action I have to take if the problem arises.
Writing sentences which are clear and concise no matter what length it is.